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Here are some haikus I have written,i am hooked on them,i have filled a few notebooks now,it is a japanese form of poetry - each one has to be three lines long and only seventeen syllables (it appeals to the part of me that has OCD!!!!) i have my own personal rule too that the title must be only one word. they're also good for making me focus and trying to discipline my words and feelings into some kind of format

SHELL

Two decades of decay
Have left me hollowed-out
Poisoned honeycomb

SHATTERED

Mind exhausted,body so ill
Broken down
To point of no return

DFIFTING

Time means nothing
Out of sync, out of control
Days all bleed into one

VICTIM

Who is this dark thief
Stealing my words,my mind,my life
What did i do?

VOID

All that's left is blankness
Off-white and expansive
Like old dirty snow

TORMENT

No reason,no cure for this pain
Endless,nameless,heartless
Crushing me

NUMB

Dead-eyed,empty, zombie girl
Aimlessly drifting through town
Through nothing

SLOW

World so slurred,gelatinous
Clock's hands drag through treacle
An eerie still

FLATTENED

Droning despair,nags like toothache
Pressing me down
Into the abyss

HEAVY

Heavy with misery,fat with food
Despair's black weight
Crushes my chest

IMPOSSIBLE

Everything so hard,so awful
The daily trials of life
Unbearable

LEAF

Blackened and curling
As if charred in some atrocity
The leaf rots

POND

Small square,murky water
Trembling in breeze
Yellowing leaves stagnate

ROSE

Lone rose, still fresh
Refusing to accept summer's death
Pink as young skin

Wow! That's great! You found something! Yay!!!!!

some more seventeen syllable rantings -

HEADACHE

Diminished by waves of pain
Eroding me like waves
Skull assaulted

ADVANCE

On verge of something awful
Collapse is coming
Silent and stealthy

STRANGE

The most beautiful thing i was called
Was strange
Unique, wild and myself

NOTICE

Why can't they all hear it?
Wailing like a siren
My hurt beneath smiles

FAINT

Rush of heat and tingling
Dissolving girl
Determined not to fall

SMOKE

Airplane's trail scars the sky
Bissects the blue
A sneer to us left behind

LATE

Queen of chaos
Failed again, running blind
In futile apology

EXHAUSTED

Sleep-starved,confused
World shimmers surreal
It sloshes,cruel amniotic

OMINOUS

It's coming
Stealthy and darkening as autumn
Another black wave

IMPLODE

Silent collapse
Suppressing my sorrow
The hurt,screaming without words

HOSTILE

Unwilling to trust
Punishing with silence
Back turned like a left cat

RETREAT

Waste of space
I step back mentally
Ride the dull fridge-buzz in my head

It sounds like you are well on your way.... Good job! Keep it up....

I guess you're concentrating a little better now?

Lisa - those are really cool. I have never heard of Haikus before.

glad you like them mich and crystal

more crap poetry for the day -

DEMANDS

Clinging little hands
Pulling me down like anchors
Invading my space

TODDLER

If I was a child again
I would scream,cry,run loose
A little snot-streaked No

HEADACHE

Sliding back in like a snake
Squeezing my brain
Screaming that something's wrong

FOG

Slight mist of sadness around me
Like a bad aura
All black and blues

SOLIDITY

Pressing down into ground so solid
Wanting its strength
Not disappear

NIGHT

Breath catching in my chest,shaky
Fear to sleep for waking
Deep darkness

SHOWER

Watery dissolve
Sobs echo around the tiles
Tears flow freely

UNREPEATABLE

As the day draws to a close
Hysteria
I can't do it again

WORDS

Stuck inside me
The weight of the words on my shoulders
All left unsaid

ILLOGICAL

There is no cause for this effect
I hurt namelessly
I'm not sorry

I really like the one called "words"....they're all good but that one really speaks to me.

Those are beautiful haikus. Several brought tears. Tears of understanding
where it all comes from. Salty tears that stain and cleanse.
Thank you.

...are you talented! The one called "strange" is my favorite...unique, wild...beautiful and moving writes dear one.

thank you very very much for your appreciation everyone,i'm glad that they have touched you and it has really boosted my self-esteem at the end of a long and awful day. more poetry coming soon....

I really like all your haikus! Particularly, Impossible, Advance, Notice, Ominous and Unrepeatable.
I'm not a huge poetry fan really, I think I'm more of a prose person. Most poetry doesn't really do much for me. EG: I plugged my way through the required Keats at school. But, he did nothing for me, other than convince me that he wasn't terribly bright. According, to him: " Beauty is truth, and truth beauty, that is all ye know on Earth, and all ye need to know" . However, as an awful lot of what is true is not at all beautiful, and an awful lot of what is beautiful is not at all true, it's perhaps just as well he didn't live in the 21st century! However, the poetry I like I do really like. As I understand it, a haiku is meant to catch and freeze the feelings, thoughts, and experience of a moment in time. And, you do that really well. Are you sure that you're not Welsh?

Thank you very much for your positive feedback, i'm really glad you like them. I managed to avoid Keats at school, we did a lot of Yeats instead, just one letter out but i like him a whole lot better!

Due to popular request (well, one, thanks TackingIntoTheWind) here are some of my latest -

WISPY

Stretched thin and quivering
Like cats whiskers
Streaks of cloud around sunset

HORIZON

Ribbons of lilac
Blue, grey, blood-orange
Slowly morph into darkness

SLEEP

Fear of letting go
And of morning's eviction
From unconsciousness

NOBODY

I'm falling through the cracks
Untethered to this Earth
Abandoning myself

DISEMBODIED

I can't feel this page
This pen dead wood in a dead hand
These words nothing

ROBOT

Little automated feet
Clockwork brain
Go through their futile motions

SABOTAGE

Shred my life with my own hands
Like fragments of tissue
Useless for tears

HIBERNATION

Dulled and deadened
Into this stagnating nest
Hiding, walled-in for winter

SELFISH

Vision narrowing
To a point of pointlessness
A landscape of self

ESTRANGED

My body teeters
Through a world peculiar
I can't feel a thing

FLOWERS

Heads drooping, brittle decay
Water long since dried-up
Dying romance

HELPLESS

Scrunched up like dirty laundry
Dead weight, dread waits
Unable to live life

SEAWEED

Vomited out from the sea
Huddled in dark piles
Salty ribbons lost

STARLINGS

Swarming across the sky
Like clouds of soot
Blackening in unison

WIND
Icy air ripples the puddles
Chilling me
Branches bow to its force

DESOLATE
Cold and greying
Winter landscape giving up life
Retreats as i am

SHY

Hidden, apologetic
Like words between brackets
Spooled-up and mute

FOOTPRINTS

Etched in beach stones
Meandering like a question mark
Stretching onwards

SEA

Brewing up, roaring
Like the rage of a giant
Hissing at my feet

GIRL

She runs, regardless
Seeking sea treasures
Little feet crunching up stones

GULLS

Hanging in the air
Like particles of dust
Bat-winged, mewing like cats

I'm impressed! I can't really make a Haiku no matter how much it looks easy. I like the Strange haiku. I can relate