Haikus
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Haikus
Here are some haikus I have written,i am hooked on them,i have filled a few notebooks now,it is a japanese form of poetry - each one has to be three lines long and only seventeen syllables (it appeals to the part of me that has OCD!!!!) i have my own personal rule too that the title must be only one word. they're also good for making me focus and trying to discipline my words and feelings into some kind of format
SHELL
Two decades of decay
Have left me hollowed-out
Poisoned honeycomb
SHATTERED
Mind exhausted,body so ill
Broken down
To point of no return
DFIFTING
Time means nothing
Out of sync, out of control
Days all bleed into one
VICTIM
Who is this dark thief
Stealing my words,my mind,my life
What did i do?
VOID
All that's left is blankness
Off-white and expansive
Like old dirty snow
TORMENT
No reason,no cure for this pain
Endless,nameless,heartless
Crushing me
NUMB
Dead-eyed,empty, zombie girl
Aimlessly drifting through town
Through nothing
SLOW
World so slurred,gelatinous
Clock's hands drag through treacle
An eerie still
FLATTENED
Droning despair,nags like toothache
Pressing me down
Into the abyss
HEAVY
Heavy with misery,fat with food
Despair's black weight
Crushes my chest
IMPOSSIBLE
Everything so hard,so awful
The daily trials of life
Unbearable
LEAF
Blackened and curling
As if charred in some atrocity
The leaf rots
POND
Small square,murky water
Trembling in breeze
Yellowing leaves stagnate
ROSE
Lone rose, still fresh
Refusing to accept summer's death
Pink as young skin
SHELL
Two decades of decay
Have left me hollowed-out
Poisoned honeycomb
SHATTERED
Mind exhausted,body so ill
Broken down
To point of no return
DFIFTING
Time means nothing
Out of sync, out of control
Days all bleed into one
VICTIM
Who is this dark thief
Stealing my words,my mind,my life
What did i do?
VOID
All that's left is blankness
Off-white and expansive
Like old dirty snow
TORMENT
No reason,no cure for this pain
Endless,nameless,heartless
Crushing me
NUMB
Dead-eyed,empty, zombie girl
Aimlessly drifting through town
Through nothing
SLOW
World so slurred,gelatinous
Clock's hands drag through treacle
An eerie still
FLATTENED
Droning despair,nags like toothache
Pressing me down
Into the abyss
HEAVY
Heavy with misery,fat with food
Despair's black weight
Crushes my chest
IMPOSSIBLE
Everything so hard,so awful
The daily trials of life
Unbearable
LEAF
Blackened and curling
As if charred in some atrocity
The leaf rots
POND
Small square,murky water
Trembling in breeze
Yellowing leaves stagnate
ROSE
Lone rose, still fresh
Refusing to accept summer's death
Pink as young skin
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some more seventeen syllable rantings -
HEADACHE
Diminished by waves of pain
Eroding me like waves
Skull assaulted
ADVANCE
On verge of something awful
Collapse is coming
Silent and stealthy
STRANGE
The most beautiful thing i was called
Was strange
Unique, wild and myself
NOTICE
Why can't they all hear it?
Wailing like a siren
My hurt beneath smiles
FAINT
Rush of heat and tingling
Dissolving girl
Determined not to fall
SMOKE
Airplane's trail scars the sky
Bissects the blue
A sneer to us left behind
LATE
Queen of chaos
Failed again, running blind
In futile apology
EXHAUSTED
Sleep-starved,confused
World shimmers surreal
It sloshes,cruel amniotic
OMINOUS
It's coming
Stealthy and darkening as autumn
Another black wave
IMPLODE
Silent collapse
Suppressing my sorrow
The hurt,screaming without words
HOSTILE
Unwilling to trust
Punishing with silence
Back turned like a left cat
RETREAT
Waste of space
I step back mentally
Ride the dull fridge-buzz in my head
HEADACHE
Diminished by waves of pain
Eroding me like waves
Skull assaulted
ADVANCE
On verge of something awful
Collapse is coming
Silent and stealthy
STRANGE
The most beautiful thing i was called
Was strange
Unique, wild and myself
NOTICE
Why can't they all hear it?
Wailing like a siren
My hurt beneath smiles
FAINT
Rush of heat and tingling
Dissolving girl
Determined not to fall
SMOKE
Airplane's trail scars the sky
Bissects the blue
A sneer to us left behind
LATE
Queen of chaos
Failed again, running blind
In futile apology
EXHAUSTED
Sleep-starved,confused
World shimmers surreal
It sloshes,cruel amniotic
OMINOUS
It's coming
Stealthy and darkening as autumn
Another black wave
IMPLODE
Silent collapse
Suppressing my sorrow
The hurt,screaming without words
HOSTILE
Unwilling to trust
Punishing with silence
Back turned like a left cat
RETREAT
Waste of space
I step back mentally
Ride the dull fridge-buzz in my head
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more crap poetry for the day -
DEMANDS
Clinging little hands
Pulling me down like anchors
Invading my space
TODDLER
If I was a child again
I would scream,cry,run loose
A little snot-streaked No
HEADACHE
Sliding back in like a snake
Squeezing my brain
Screaming that something's wrong
FOG
Slight mist of sadness around me
Like a bad aura
All black and blues
SOLIDITY
Pressing down into ground so solid
Wanting its strength
Not disappear
NIGHT
Breath catching in my chest,shaky
Fear to sleep for waking
Deep darkness
SHOWER
Watery dissolve
Sobs echo around the tiles
Tears flow freely
UNREPEATABLE
As the day draws to a close
Hysteria
I can't do it again
WORDS
Stuck inside me
The weight of the words on my shoulders
All left unsaid
ILLOGICAL
There is no cause for this effect
I hurt namelessly
I'm not sorry
DEMANDS
Clinging little hands
Pulling me down like anchors
Invading my space
TODDLER
If I was a child again
I would scream,cry,run loose
A little snot-streaked No
HEADACHE
Sliding back in like a snake
Squeezing my brain
Screaming that something's wrong
FOG
Slight mist of sadness around me
Like a bad aura
All black and blues
SOLIDITY
Pressing down into ground so solid
Wanting its strength
Not disappear
NIGHT
Breath catching in my chest,shaky
Fear to sleep for waking
Deep darkness
SHOWER
Watery dissolve
Sobs echo around the tiles
Tears flow freely
UNREPEATABLE
As the day draws to a close
Hysteria
I can't do it again
WORDS
Stuck inside me
The weight of the words on my shoulders
All left unsaid
ILLOGICAL
There is no cause for this effect
I hurt namelessly
I'm not sorry
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WOW WOW WOW
...are you talented! The one called "strange" is my favorite...unique, wild...beautiful and moving writes dear one.
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I really like all your haikus! Particularly, Impossible, Advance, Notice, Ominous and Unrepeatable.
I'm not a huge poetry fan really, I think I'm more of a prose person. Most poetry doesn't really do much for me. EG: I plugged my way through the required Keats at school. But, he did nothing for me, other than convince me that he wasn't terribly bright. According, to him: " Beauty is truth, and truth beauty, that is all ye know on Earth, and all ye need to know" . However, as an awful lot of what is true is not at all beautiful, and an awful lot of what is beautiful is not at all true, it's perhaps just as well he didn't live in the 21st century! However, the poetry I like I do really like. As I understand it, a haiku is meant to catch and freeze the feelings, thoughts, and experience of a moment in time. And, you do that really well. Are you sure that you're not Welsh?
I'm not a huge poetry fan really, I think I'm more of a prose person. Most poetry doesn't really do much for me. EG: I plugged my way through the required Keats at school. But, he did nothing for me, other than convince me that he wasn't terribly bright. According, to him: " Beauty is truth, and truth beauty, that is all ye know on Earth, and all ye need to know" . However, as an awful lot of what is true is not at all beautiful, and an awful lot of what is beautiful is not at all true, it's perhaps just as well he didn't live in the 21st century! However, the poetry I like I do really like. As I understand it, a haiku is meant to catch and freeze the feelings, thoughts, and experience of a moment in time. And, you do that really well. Are you sure that you're not Welsh?
Due to popular request (well, one, thanks TackingIntoTheWind) here are some of my latest -
WISPY
Stretched thin and quivering
Like cats whiskers
Streaks of cloud around sunset
HORIZON
Ribbons of lilac
Blue, grey, blood-orange
Slowly morph into darkness
SLEEP
Fear of letting go
And of morning's eviction
From unconsciousness
NOBODY
I'm falling through the cracks
Untethered to this Earth
Abandoning myself
DISEMBODIED
I can't feel this page
This pen dead wood in a dead hand
These words nothing
ROBOT
Little automated feet
Clockwork brain
Go through their futile motions
SABOTAGE
Shred my life with my own hands
Like fragments of tissue
Useless for tears
HIBERNATION
Dulled and deadened
Into this stagnating nest
Hiding, walled-in for winter
SELFISH
Vision narrowing
To a point of pointlessness
A landscape of self
ESTRANGED
My body teeters
Through a world peculiar
I can't feel a thing
FLOWERS
Heads drooping, brittle decay
Water long since dried-up
Dying romance
HELPLESS
Scrunched up like dirty laundry
Dead weight, dread waits
Unable to live life
SEAWEED
Vomited out from the sea
Huddled in dark piles
Salty ribbons lost
STARLINGS
Swarming across the sky
Like clouds of soot
Blackening in unison
WIND
Icy air ripples the puddles
Chilling me
Branches bow to its force
DESOLATE
Cold and greying
Winter landscape giving up life
Retreats as i am
SHY
Hidden, apologetic
Like words between brackets
Spooled-up and mute
FOOTPRINTS
Etched in beach stones
Meandering like a question mark
Stretching onwards
SEA
Brewing up, roaring
Like the rage of a giant
Hissing at my feet
GIRL
She runs, regardless
Seeking sea treasures
Little feet crunching up stones
GULLS
Hanging in the air
Like particles of dust
Bat-winged, mewing like cats
WISPY
Stretched thin and quivering
Like cats whiskers
Streaks of cloud around sunset
HORIZON
Ribbons of lilac
Blue, grey, blood-orange
Slowly morph into darkness
SLEEP
Fear of letting go
And of morning's eviction
From unconsciousness
NOBODY
I'm falling through the cracks
Untethered to this Earth
Abandoning myself
DISEMBODIED
I can't feel this page
This pen dead wood in a dead hand
These words nothing
ROBOT
Little automated feet
Clockwork brain
Go through their futile motions
SABOTAGE
Shred my life with my own hands
Like fragments of tissue
Useless for tears
HIBERNATION
Dulled and deadened
Into this stagnating nest
Hiding, walled-in for winter
SELFISH
Vision narrowing
To a point of pointlessness
A landscape of self
ESTRANGED
My body teeters
Through a world peculiar
I can't feel a thing
FLOWERS
Heads drooping, brittle decay
Water long since dried-up
Dying romance
HELPLESS
Scrunched up like dirty laundry
Dead weight, dread waits
Unable to live life
SEAWEED
Vomited out from the sea
Huddled in dark piles
Salty ribbons lost
STARLINGS
Swarming across the sky
Like clouds of soot
Blackening in unison
WIND
Icy air ripples the puddles
Chilling me
Branches bow to its force
DESOLATE
Cold and greying
Winter landscape giving up life
Retreats as i am
SHY
Hidden, apologetic
Like words between brackets
Spooled-up and mute
FOOTPRINTS
Etched in beach stones
Meandering like a question mark
Stretching onwards
SEA
Brewing up, roaring
Like the rage of a giant
Hissing at my feet
GIRL
She runs, regardless
Seeking sea treasures
Little feet crunching up stones
GULLS
Hanging in the air
Like particles of dust
Bat-winged, mewing like cats
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